Miss Ching

You say "rock and roll", I think "Elvis Presley".

Hi Kikaharu! Don't hate me, please, but I didn't like this poem. (But really that's just my opinion!! It doesn't mean that others won't like it!) It just didn't really ...

You get a coin -inserts coin-

You say maniac with a knife, I say AAHH

I agree with the two people before me. This truly is brilliant. The emotion is there. The feeling is there. It's the scene that so many children fear the most: ...

Hi Elinor! I've got a few nitpicks: [1] Though you're dressed in rags you wear an air of queenly grace This was just a typo I think. [2] The sky ...

Hmm... I'm pretty sure the answer is "Ask Bob" XD

Hi Blink! Cool poem ;) I whisper my words through the cold paned glass. No ear can hear them, no voice replies. The third line to this sound kind of ...

Hi kmb_7803! I'm Miss Ching and I'll be your reviewer this time! :D I want to say, firstly, that I really like your writing style. It's fun, interesting and unique ...

Hello Black_Panther! :D I like the concept of your story. You've done well with personifying the cheetahs. In just this short part, you've shown exactly who's boss with the cheetahs, ...

Merope Gaunt’s Last Moments It was snowing heavily that evening on New Year’s Eve. Through the dense sheet of cold hard snowflakes, a silhouette of a woman could be seen ...

Hi! I like your idea, very creative. I have a few things that I'd like to point out though. I have a problem with your first paragraph. You say that ...

Hi Boni_Bee! I think you've got an interesting start for your story. It really grabs the readers' attention. Just some things: 1. You've missed some periods. Wake to the sound ...

Hi lauren94nell and welcome to YWS! Firstly I'd like to congratulate you for having such a captivating story that I didn't click the back button after the first paragraph. There ...

“Natalie, darling… your father and I… we’re getting a divorce.” Her parents stood side by side staring at her nervously, waiting for her reaction. Natalie knew this was going to ...